Reviews for Unsaved
Naatz chapter 1 . 10/26/2004
This is a very strong poem. Touched me very deeply. Your sentences are seperated well, and it really stabs the meaning through the reader's heart.
The only problems I had are the usage 'neither', 'either', 'or' and 'nor'. The first sentence should be "I feel neither love nor hate", and "They are niether and the same" should be "neither".
"White is far to pure" - 'to' should be 'too'.
That's just technicalities. It's really a lovely piece.