|Reviews for McDonald's Girl|
| Lukertin chapter 10 . 2/28/2005
Your stories are always enjoyable, and for the most part, I don't believe in endings either. In my opinion a story is just the beginning.
Great work, as always.
| Lukertin chapter 9 . 2/1/2005
Man, her dad is such an asshole. I'm glad to see this story hasn't died! It's a great one.
| gram chapter 8 . 1/29/2005
Sorry it took me so long to review but I love the new chapters. Update soon.
| Lukertin chapter 8 . 1/9/2005
Well I think it's ok! And you're 10 days late, man. tsk tsk
| nadljfaithglingh chapter 7 . 12/23/2004
Hm. I think this is my favorite chapter so far. Don't know if I've said this before, but Kris' thought patterns remind me of my own (sans the sex part, of course _~) And now I know their ages; sweet. (And kudos for the transitions; bolding and such; it really helped out my slow, sorry excuse for a brain) Anyway, keep on writing and Happy Holidays -Kera
| Lukertin chapter 7 . 12/23/2004
Thou shalt not be flamed. I just got home and what's waiting there for me? Eh? Yay!
| nadljfaithglingh chapter 6 . 12/22/2004
Guilt smile, hm? Aw, and just when he got up the nerve to ask, too; bummer Write more, soon!
Happy Holidays -Kera
| Lukertin chapter 6 . 12/21/2004
Uh oh, what's to happen now?
| Trmpetplaya1 chapter 5 . 12/17/2004
HA! I LOVE your story! It's had me rolling since I started reading it. _ One thing, though, is that I'm having a hard time understanding the transistions from one scene to the next and sometimes I can't tell who's talking. (But I still manage to figure it out in the end ) Other than that, I love the numerous song references and the anime/Japanese inserts and the old guy's comment. (And that Kris has a uniform fetish! HA!) Oh, quick question: how old is Kris? I dervied from later chapters that they're all in High School, but the unknown-age-thing is throwing off my whole perception of the characters. (In my mind right now, they're 17~18-ish) Keep up the good work! 0 -Kera
| Lukertin chapter 5 . 12/16/2004
Man, that part with him in the girl's locker room was hilarious...
| Lukertin chapter 4 . 11/30/2004
Sweet Jesus you're writing another one in the same style as Singing in My Sleep, what awesomeness. Super awesomeness.
| gram chapter 4 . 11/30/2004
Great chapter though a little bit confusing for me, but I can't wait till you update.
| emelaine chapter 1 . 11/26/2004
i have really enjoyed your story! it gives a break because it's quite different from the ones i've just read... i also like your writing style: unique and true. i admire it. please update soon! :-)
| DragonAiua chapter 1 . 11/25/2004
lol, I work at McDonalds, and am one of those perfectionists...yah got the prices wrong!
a quarter pounder with cheese meal is $4.03, just a little bit more with the shake...I am not sure precisely how much more though...
but I like the story!
| gram chapter 2 . 11/9/2004
I just started reading your new story and I think it will be juat as good as the last. I'm anticipating the new would not let me review for Singing in My Sleep so I just want to say the ending was true to the rest of the story and I enjoyed very much. Keep on writing:)