Reviews for McDonald's Girl |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Your stories are always enjoyable, and for the most part, I don't believe in endings either. In my opinion a story is just the beginning. Great work, as always. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man, her dad is such an asshole. I'm glad to see this story hasn't died! It's a great one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sorry it took me so long to review but I love the new chapters. Update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well I think it's ok! And you're 10 days late, man. tsk tsk |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hm. I think this is my favorite chapter so far. Don't know if I've said this before, but Kris' thought patterns remind me of my own (sans the sex part, of course _~) And now I know their ages; sweet. (And kudos for the transitions; bolding and such; it really helped out my slow, sorry excuse for a brain) Anyway, keep on writing and Happy Holidays -Kera |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thou shalt not be flamed. I just got home and what's waiting there for me? Eh? Yay! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Guilt smile, hm? Aw, and just when he got up the nerve to ask, too; bummer Write more, soon! Happy Holidays -Kera |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uh oh, what's to happen now? |
![]() ![]() HA! I LOVE your story! It's had me rolling since I started reading it. _ One thing, though, is that I'm having a hard time understanding the transistions from one scene to the next and sometimes I can't tell who's talking. (But I still manage to figure it out in the end ) Other than that, I love the numerous song references and the anime/Japanese inserts and the old guy's comment. (And that Kris has a uniform fetish! HA!) Oh, quick question: how old is Kris? I dervied from later chapters that they're all in High School, but the unknown-age-thing is throwing off my whole perception of the characters. (In my mind right now, they're 17~18-ish) Keep up the good work! 0 -Kera |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man, that part with him in the girl's locker room was hilarious... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweet Jesus you're writing another one in the same style as Singing in My Sleep, what awesomeness. Super awesomeness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter though a little bit confusing for me, but I can't wait till you update. |
![]() ![]() i have really enjoyed your story! it gives a break because it's quite different from the ones i've just read... i also like your writing style: unique and true. i admire it. please update soon! :-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol, I work at McDonalds, and am one of those perfectionists...yah got the prices wrong! a quarter pounder with cheese meal is $4.03, just a little bit more with the shake...I am not sure precisely how much more though... but I like the story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just started reading your new story and I think it will be juat as good as the last. I'm anticipating the new would not let me review for Singing in My Sleep so I just want to say the ending was true to the rest of the story and I enjoyed very much. Keep on writing:) |