Reviews for Downward Spiral Rising |
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![]() ![]() ![]() haii really nice story there please update it |
![]() ![]() Hey! Hope you're doing okay and feel motivated soon to update :] I really do miss Connor. And Claire. And Kyle. And Chloe of course. Even her mom. Oh geez, I must have reread chapter 18 at least five times and I still laugh at the exchange about movies between Chloe's Mom and Connor. Warren's starting to get on my nerves more and more. And Ian... Hmm, I still don't know what to think. Besides that he's seriously dense. But so is Chloe. I do like Ian though. I might disagree with one of the reviews. Not all of the characters are shallow. They're pretty hormonal, sure, but hey, they're teenagers. I can relate almost all of your characters with people I know in real life. Except Connor. He's just special. That's why I love him :] And someone made a comment about the disturbance of Connor and Chloe's possible romance... Well, I have definitely seen a bunch of romance stories between stepsiblings, and Chloe's Mom & Connor's Dad aren't even married, yet. So you're fine. I just hope their parents break up or something. I know, that sounds kind of horrible, but anything to keep Con and Chlo together. Last but not least (Sorry, this is turning out to be pretty long), I do not think that you are lacking a theme, necessarily. Somewhere, there's an underlying theme that you can easily develop if you wanted to. Though I thought it was a little odd that someone commented on that. Now that I think about it, ninety percent of the stories that I've read on Fictionpress don't even have a central theme. So do what you want with the story. It's your baby. And I'll definitely be reading it until it's finished and rereading after it's completed. This story is seriously one of the funniest that I've ever read. Keep up the great work! |
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![]() ![]() I love this story! It's amazing and I hope you update really soon. Don't stop writing because this story is great. Your characters and everything about this story is truly amazing. UPDATE SOON! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So I've never read this before yesterday, but I really love it! You are an awesome writer. It was really a surprise to me to find Nikki so unstable becauase she seems really normal throughout the whole thing. And P.S. I think Chloe should deffinatly end up with Connor |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really love this story! Connor is by far my favorite guy in this story;; i kind of think Ian's a loser (no offense to him or anything) and Warren's just...there. i also kind of hope that connor and chloe get together, but that'd be like partially incest, so yeah. / but anyways, keep up the good work and update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() dude, this a great story, you're trippen not updating it, someone needs to get on the ball! lol, no but forreal though i love this story, i'd started reading it a LONG time ago and just stopped for some reason and you've had many chapters...I hope youupdate soon though, you don't wanna lose any reviewers by waiting so long...update soon please, i love this story and am eager to learn more of kyles condition, conner, warren, and old stubborn/crazy nicole...i really hope conner and Chloe will get together, Warren just seems to be confused, I hate the guys who like multiple girls. It'll never work if warren and her do end up getting together, he'll just end up liking some other chick i think...and i'm eager to learn of Ryan's and Conners player businnes, kind of reminds me of my brother and his bestfriend...love it, update soon, please! |
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![]() ![]() Poor Warren...I like him, and he'd be much better off with Chloe. They seem to go very well together...anyway, i hope you update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome story, so you will be continuing right? you still update this don't you? i know it's been awhile since you updated, but you will update again right? so i personally have no issue with the whole chloe thing, i kinda like him better than warren anyways, don't know why though. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have no idea it is to be online and reading FictionPress romance stories and finding a romance story that actually uses the name "Connie" in it. It really is disturbing...though...seeing as I'm a girl and my name is Connie and just "Connie" as a nickname for a guy is just well...disturbing. VERY disturbing. Hm. Your story's quite good actually...but it's a bit disturbing. But since Chloe and Connor are not exactly related...it's fine with me, I guess. (Though I do believe there are marriage laws that prohibit step-siblings from marrying each other if you ARE planning to have a romance between Chloe and Connor) There are a few problems with your story: 1) It's difficult to tell where the plot is going. (which you have noticed...-I read A/N's) 2) There is no underlying theme, no motif that connects the entire story together (that if which I can see) 3)...yeah. I can't think of a third one...but I NEED to have a third one...gah. But it's still good that there's a number three, yes? Now...things that are well and good with this story: 1) The story isn't predictable. It's inventive. And non-cliche. 2) It's humorous and interesting(allows the reader to wonder at who is going to be the other main love interest) 3) Your story has proper grammar & spelling and good choice of words. You probably don't think that that is much of a compliment...but it is. Trust me; I've seen way too many stories on FictionPress that have grammar/spelling problems that it makes me sick. Heh...I've found a third con to add to the list(wow...aren't I nice?...but it's constructive criticism D) 3) The characters are a bit shallow...but I'm sure you'll probably develop their personality later on. So yes. Don't forget to continue to update! D |
![]() ![]() hah. This is just too CUTE. You have GOT to continue. Well, you should. I love the history behind Chloe and Connor's 'friendship' and Warren and Chloe's 'intimacy' (which would just be way cool if it remained platonic, but it can't stay that way now it seems). I am a bit confused though. So, Chloe is convinced that she is in love with Ian, and in denial with any hint of such feelings for Warren? And the deal between her and Connor is a bit ... shady. They don't seem to have interacted at all for the past, what, decade? so, Connor couldn't possibly have developed feelings for her so quickly, could he? One thing i must compliment is the way the heroine does restrains herself frmo any lustful intentions. At least, for now. |
![]() ![]() haha, wow, i lvoe this story to bits~ Ithe interaction between Conner and Chloe is so funny~ haha I can't beleive Warren did that to her thou... *Silent shock* it just seems... a bit out of character... atleast... to me it does. haha I love the food fight scene back in one of the earlier chapters~ it was hilarious~ I hope Conner and Chloe get together~ ) anyways, hope you update soon! (ur last upadte was 09-08-06, so i hope somewhere in the back of your mind, you havn't forgotten about this story~) ) |