Reviews for River of Hoplessness
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/22/2006
┬┐How can we live with pretense we don't care?

For knowing love's a chemical mixture,

Does not absolve our heart's true feelings felt,

Those daggers piercing with sharp agony,

Care not about atomic reasoning,

But whether heart with heart can bond in joy,

That momentary lifts dark veils of life,

Forgetting doom of short mortality,

As clouds disperse to welcome bright sun's rays,

So all our doubts and hesitations fade,

At even the remotest hint of Spring,

For our soul's sails unfurl with those fresh winds,

Abandoning our old protected ports,

Where months of winter held us frozen fast,

Awaiting signs of change and turning tides,

To venture forth upon love's ocean vast.
SeaVoi chapter 1 . 8/31/2005
My gosh, this was a real sad one. I hope your better!
TickleMeElmo217 chapter 1 . 11/9/2004
wow...that was amazing. definite fav!
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
aw i like this. i can so so so relate!
myno chapter 1 . 11/6/2004
thats very sad, but well expressed.
EvilNeko13 chapter 1 . 11/6/2004
Again, this is nice. The only thing that I found to fault this was the lack of punctuation. It's just a pet peve of mine, but it didn't degrade the poem at all. It sounds like something from the heart.
zamthezombieman chapter 1 . 11/6/2004
This poem is very real, I love it, I would love to get some constructive criticism, feel free to read some of my work.
Raya Dronaile chapter 1 . 11/6/2004
again, very powerful and sad. great poem. "Wanting to drown in this river of hopelessness." Great line, full of meaning. wonderful job!