|Reviews for Upon A Time Undone|
| midoriturtle chapter 5 . 5/12/2005
I *adore* this story. Actually, I've loved all of your writing on FictionPress so far. The quality of your stories is far better than most of the work posted here, and you tend to go 'against the cliche' in a way that is both original and interesting. It's a genuine pleasure to read your work and if you ever become a published writer I'll be one of the first to buy your books. In the mean time, I look forward to the conclusion/ continuation of 'Upon A Time Undone' and anything else you choose to post here.
| futagoakuma-tenshi01 chapter 5 . 5/5/2005
Is this ficcie done? Well, love it! Great story!
| danceangel chapter 3 . 3/31/2005
This is a super cute story! I can't wait to read more _
| golden-flame4 chapter 5 . 3/23/2005
O_O WHOA~! very nice! splendidly written! will there be more? :D like side-stories of sorts? or perhaps more chapters? XD
| Hazard chapter 5 . 3/16/2005
ah! lovely- will you be continuing thi or is it an impromptu end? Or are you planning on a sequel. It was very neat how you were able to step around any risque stuf...but its just whets one's appetite.
Brilliant piece of writing- and each chapter is of great length. I wish there had been more descriptions of plaves, rooms, gardens etc. for visualization- other than that it was really great. Kudos!
| tomato-greens chapter 5 . 3/6/2005
(Fangirlish squealing commences.) Fluffy plot, fluffy plot, fluffy plot! Woo-hoo! And there's a story line and it's not all clichéd and my guess was kinda right and I am running out of lack of punctuation and that makes no sense and I feel like I could run laps right now.
I don't know whether this is GREAT praise for your story, or just a very bad comment on me, but I say we go with the first option, shall we?
As always, the characterization is absolutely fa-a-a-a-a-a-abulous, the plot is tight and flawless, the details are consistent, and the characters are lovable in their respective ways (be said ways morbid or adorable, they all work).
Middle English, Middle English, I don't know if this is the right term but (insert fangirlish squealing . . . again . . . here)! On the off-chance you know, how exactly does a person pronounce punctuation? Because I know people who can but I can't imitate them.
All right, before this becomes a (more) random blurble of shtuff and not general critquing, I'll go away. But it was absolutely LOVELY!
| Liara chapter 5 . 3/3/2005
You are now officially one of my favorite authors. I read First Person Perspective tonight, and then I went to your profile to find more and found this. I love rewritten fairy-tales of any kind, but those with secretive characters and spunky princesses are always my favorites.
And, I am loving Aiden. He's very sweet, and much smarter than he thinks he is. Now I want to know what the deal is with him and Bane, and how they met. The herbalist was great as well.
I look forward to reading more!
| Ryochan8 chapter 5 . 3/1/2005
Whoa...you finally updated. *sheepish grin* I was worried that you had abandoned this story, but if time is all it takes for the chapters to come out as splendidly as this, then take all of it you need. I was pleasantly suprised at how the chapter ended with hints at future TristanxCairon. Bloody brilliant work, and I hope that the next chapter comes out soon. -;;
| Fei chapter 4 . 1/31/2005
Please write more. I'm begging you!And I'm not sure whether you intended it or not but the prince seems rather gay... and rather taken with Cairon , please, please continue. This is the most interesting take I've ever seen on a fairytale. Unique, and utterly brilliant.
| Trinket chapter 4 . 1/9/2005
Fantastic! I love the way you play with both 'Sleeping Beauty/Briar Rose' and 'Cinderella' in one story. The 'heroes' are all very likeable and I just love hating the 'villain'. This story reminds me a bit of Amaretto's 'Fairytales', both twisting aforementioned fairytales , you use adjectives very well; not too much so that one feels like wringing the writer's neck, or too little which would make the story too bland. Excessive use of adjectives is my most common reason for stop reading a story.. way too annoying.
Well, I do hope you update soon.. this is among the best stories I've read on FictionPress for quite a while.. or ever. Cheers!
| Trespassed chapter 4 . 1/1/2005
OO! I can't wait for an update, wonderful story!
| tomomi chapter 4 . 12/26/2004
EllaEvil. Okay, I understand. *nods* But poor Cairon! His poor sister! The witch must burn! Kill/Punish/Maim/etc Ella! Hmm, I had thought Finbar and Eleanor seemed _close_. Well, now I know. I also like Ruari very much! Oh, and is that a spark I see between Tristan and Cairon? Is this the beginning of a beautiful relationship? Haha. But then again I notice the same thing between Ruari and Cairon. Maybe I'm reading too deeply into this. Anyway, wonderful as always! PLEASE update soon! Sometime this week? Maybe? And...um... if it's no trouble, will you e-mail me on progress with this story and when it's going to be updated? Please? We can be friends!
| tomomi chapter 3 . 12/26/2004
As always, wonderful! I actually like Ella's stepsister! Ella, on the other hand, I can already tell she's a bad, bad lady. Must be stopped! And the poor prince! Whatever happened to him? He's definitely under a spell. I may be dense, but I'm not dense! Okay, well that didn't make much sense, but eh. Aiden (I love this name!) and Bane make a cute couple. Poor, poor Bane though. Let's hope Aiden doesn't do anything stupid.
| tomomi chapter 2 . 12/26/2004
My gosh, I love this story more as I read it. You're stringing me along quite successfully. Usually, I don't like the female characters at all, but I ADORE Eleanor. She has spunk, if I do say so myself. Finbar has also won my love too. And little Colm- *hugs him to death*. Cairon is still my favorite, of course. He's... different from most characters I've read about. Also, I laughed a lot in this chapter. Charming. Oh yeah, this story seriously deserves more reviews! But then again, only about 5% of the people who read fanfics/fics actually review. Think about it.
| tomomi chapter 1 . 12/26/2004
WOW. This is really good. Not only does it come with a VERY promising plot, but it's very nicely written and I LOVE the length of this chapter. It's also a very nice twist to Cinderella- very original. I commend you for that. The characters are beautiful. I love Cairon already. Linnie and her family- marvelous people. All in all, I love this story already. So now I wonder what will happen next...