Reviews for Reality
Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 4/26/2009
[hearing every beat of you precious heart]

Shouldn't "you" be "your?"

[You lips brushing against my face]

It was done again so I'm not sure whether or not it's intentional.

[and when I woke up]

Not entirely sure, but shouldn't it be "wake?"

I felt that this flowed well.

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Nobody00100101 chapter 1 . 7/20/2008
I am typically not a big fan of love poems (if you read my poem "Welcome to Ethanville Population One" you will know why), but this one is exceptional.

I can see in my head a lazy day with two lovers in each other's embrace.

I cannot critique this in any way because it bears weight. I envy your poetry skills.
hiding behind amber eyes chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
aww. you can tell how much you love your bf. i like this b/c its totally real.
JC-Saved-Me chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
Aww this is so cute!
lifescrewsusall chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
it's good. came from the heart
TheQueenOfSpace chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
AW! Very cute. Keep writing!
confused being99 chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
thats a really good poem, i really like it. its soi sweet. sad ending but ... hopeful sorta i donno, good job
keep writing
confused being99
Sinera chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
a title? hm... 'Living My Dream'? I think yours actually fits well. I really enjoyed this poem. Keep up the good work!
(by the way: fourth line down, I think you mean 'every beat of your precious heart' not 'every bear of you precious heart'. ;) )
myno chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
Hm, title suggestions. I like the title "reality" better than Real Dreams, so you could think about that. Also, there's a small typo- hearing every bear... it should be hearing every beat. Good poem though.