|Reviews for Untitled 111504|
| myno chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
Hm, not one of your best. Title suggestions: I kind of like the title "clueless."
I think the line "to wipe away the tears from my eyes? " reads better without the word "away." So, you can think about those two things, peace out.
| hiding behind amber eyes chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
ok ill warn you, this is going to be a long review. lol i like this poem, its very much like the wondering i do. :) i have to say im sorry for not keeping up w/ your work. i love your work and u have an amazing talent, but im just slow. lol and i would like to thank you for your awesome reviews. your spelling/grammer fixes help lots. i know you are not allowed to alk to those you don't know, but do you think your parents would let u edit my story? i oculd emial you the chapters b4 i post them. plz? if not no hard feelings :)
| lifescrewsusall chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
I like your use of questions in the beginning and then how it got more emotion toward the end. i enjoyed this one
| Please Deactivate chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
you might try the title..."Don't Go Too Far"