|Reviews for A Truth|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/7/2005
¿why should sun tell moon, she lacks subtlety?
¿why does sweet well compare itself to brook?
in every purpose that we live dear,
so many differences ensconce quaint,
rivulets hanging from green arbor's vine,
portions of rainbows blowing through moon's light,
there's no attempt to differentiate,
those feelings that inspired emerge from song,
from distant voices echoing azure,
allowing us to sense ourselves again,
as Spring that brings it coolest rainfall storm,
releasing static,—relieving motion.
| myno chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
i like the last bit, I say leave it in.
| SeaVoi chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
That is really cool I really like it ::adds to favorite poems list thingy::
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 11/15/2004
I liked it... Not sure if you need to have the last little section of it though... Oh by inserting some more punctuation in it, you could really give more of a sense of how to read it. I read it about five different ways by stopping and starting in different places. You could guide the reader more by doing that to show how you want it read. Just some con-crit...
anyways good job!