Reviews for Nauseous But Still Alive
Made in U.S.A chapter 1 . 11/16/2004
another masterpiece!
Syrins chapter 1 . 11/16/2004
Liked the idea, and your use of words, very original. Greatly done!
Hitsumei chapter 1 . 11/16/2004
Another work of art. The story is great, very relatable. I felt as though I was in your position when I read this, I felt the feelings described. You manage to entice the reader with each of your lines. Fantastic. The only thing that I've noticed is that you don't often put punctuation at the end of your lines. If your poem was to be read as it was written, each line that didn't have any punctuation at the end would run right into the next sentence, which doesn't seem as though it flows properly for the poem. Maybe comma use at the end of sentences would help? If that was how you meant the poem to be read, I would completely understand, but it just doesn't seem as though it flows that way. Breaks at the ends of your sentences seemed to fit better. Anyway, great job on another amazing poem.
Take care,
Aya