Reviews for Obligated Wanderer
LeahBird chapter 1 . 6/15/2005
Your rhyming worked out well in this one. The mystery of it was very intriguing. A wordy riddle well planned out and written. Nice job.
allyburner chapter 1 . 5/28/2005
Woah, cool... really loved it. The rhyming worked a treat, and the rythm's great. There was this one line where it seemed a bit long, but that doesn't matter. Hmm... should try putting it to music... Anyhow, great poem! -Ally B.
Garret Levram chapter 1 . 3/25/2005
Very nicely written. No suggestions, it's great just the way it is. Hope you did well in that contest, your work is commendable.
confusionlove chapter 1 . 12/26/2004
ok, first: i wrote a poem about water once for a contest, and had a lot of fun. this is great in that you start out not knowing who the wanderer is, but it builds up towards the end until you suddenly understand exactly what you , onto a few tips: when you say 'you' in one line, you shouldn't switch to 'one' in the next. it should be either 'one' all the way, or 'you' all the way (one sounds better). Also, don't you mean _un_predictable?
KwazyKandyPie chapter 1 . 12/8/2004
i hope you will/have won the contest! _

this is a great poem, the vocabulary, metophars, little mystery to keep you wondering what it is 'till the end...over all, great! _
zzocco chapter 1 . 11/29/2004
hmm.. so who is this he?
Free-Writer chapter 1 . 11/22/2004
Good luck on your contest. I believe you might get somewhere with it!
poetic abortion chapter 1 . 11/19/2004
This is really good !

Noelle
Mynix chapter 1 . 11/18/2004
Very beautiful riddle quality like poem.. metaphoric
keltica chapter 1 . 11/18/2004
surely in the top rank, lol!

Anyways very good effort, some interesting ideas ... good job!

keltica, the celtic fire from within
scudcrow chapter 1 . 11/17/2004
Decent rhythm. I'd give it an 8 on a scale of 1-10.

Pl R&R my work :)
Kusje chapter 1 . 11/17/2004
thats really good. thanks for reviewing!