Your rhyming worked out well in this one. The mystery of it was very intriguing. A wordy riddle well planned out and written. Nice job.

Woah, cool... really loved it. The rhyming worked a treat, and the rythm's great. There was this one line where it seemed a bit long, but that doesn't matter. Hmm... should try putting it to music... Anyhow, great poem! -Ally B.

Very nicely written. No suggestions, it's great just the way it is. Hope you did well in that contest, your work is commendable.

ok, first: i wrote a poem about water once for a contest, and had a lot of fun. this is great in that you start out not knowing who the wanderer is, but it builds up towards the end until you suddenly understand exactly what you , onto a few tips: when you say 'you' in one line, you shouldn't switch to 'one' in the next. it should be either 'one' all the way, or 'you' all the way (one sounds better). Also, don't you mean _un_predictable?

i hope you will/have won the contest! _

this is a great poem, the vocabulary, metophars, little mystery to keep you wondering what it is 'till the end...over all, great! _

hmm.. so who is this he?

Good luck on your contest. I believe you might get somewhere with it!

This is really good !

Noelle

Very beautiful riddle quality like poem.. metaphoric

surely in the top rank, lol!

Anyways very good effort, some interesting ideas ... good job!

keltica, the celtic fire from within

Decent rhythm. I'd give it an 8 on a scale of 1-10.

Pl R&R my work :)

thats really good. thanks for reviewing!