Reviews for So Pure
Clap Clap Raise Your Hands chapter 1 . 6/3/2005
cool, i like how you can compare yourself to what you see outside.. something a lot of people wouldnt be able to do! to let you know, i have posted my poem as inspired by "Should I Trust?" my poem is called "Looking Out" x weasel within x
Vici chapter 1 . 1/28/2005
Well writen, flows smooth and it makes me happy too. love ur work gonna read more keep it up.
Hitsumei chapter 1 . 1/6/2005
Good job Ally. Another good poem, again, the rhyme scheme was very good. You kept it structured almost the entire time, which is good, however, somewhere in there you lost it completely for two lines or so. It got me a little off track because it didn't fit with the emotion of the poem, as if you were feeling some sort of sudden panic or you got caught up in the emotion of the poem. Since it wasn't because of that sort of thing, it drew away from the poem for a bit, but it was a short-lived confusion, no worries. This poem was written because of something you saw and what it made you feel, and you managed to make it feel genuine, which is really good. A lot of people who write about that sort of thing usually sound as though they forced the poem, as though they wrote a poem for the sake of writing a poem, for the sake of being poetic, which really kills it. You didn't do this, which is positively amazing, in my opinion. Good job. I have to stop reviewing your works for the day (Mom needs the computer for homework), but I'll be back soon, no worries. Have a great care,Auya
fadedrainbows chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
This poem is wonderful. It is truly heartfelt and peaceful. My only complaint is the rhythm. You start out the poem rhyming, but then that just dissapears. Anywho, this was nice.

Kressida chapter 1 . 11/22/2004
once again great work alex! the imagery was perfect and i loved it.. luv Zai
Out-Of-Reality chapter 1 . 11/20/2004
I do that a lot too...kind of inspiring actually. Another piece of art!
twistedtruths chapter 1 . 11/18/2004
wow. i loved that. it paintd a perfect picturein my mind. it was really good. one of your best I think.
Keith Andrew chapter 1 . 11/18/2004
This is amazing stuff. I love the imagery here, it reaminds me of my favourite time of the, of course the night.

Love you

Keith Andrew