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Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 9/1/2006
My Dear Simple Plan 13:

O, the perfidy of promises,

Made so easily, then cast aside,

Like round oyster shells after pearl is gone,—

Piles accumulate to slowly crumble,

What once seemed so hard and shell protective;

Yet, time is such a demanding mistress,

With tugs and pulls causing so much distress,

No wonder youth today is full of stress,—

Energy conservation they should stress,

But, action and deed they try to compress;

Really, this is not some sort of complaint,

Though its tenor is not real compliant,—

A reminder to be self-reliant,

And life's wrinkles iron to a straight plait,

To then become our modern laity;

So, laugh a bit with lots of gaity,

At least make it a high priority,

When you get to your fine sorority,

Having achieved your seniority,—

But gees, these words have much porosity.
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 11/19/2004
needs a title but hey, good poem! sorry my reviews are a bore.
hiding behind amber eyes chapter 1 . 11/18/2004
dang, u better be close to that goal! i'm doing alot of reviewing! lol good poem