Reviews for A Touch of Death
DormDad chapter 28 . 7/12/2012
The story tie-in with the restaurant seems vague. Why is Charon there other than the paltry sum of his wages? The story seems disjointed with the ghost suddenly snapping into Charon's line. Charon's reaction seems a bit out of the ordinary too. Hopefully, these things will be resolved as the story progresses. Write On!
Vampire chapter 9 . 7/11/2012
I gotta say neither of them are to bright... And Callisto has got to be the worst character and addition to any story ever. Seriously what a pain in the ass.

Why hasn't he tried to make her go away waving his scythe through a few dozen times or something? I mean she loud, tries to make everyone think he's crazy and can't even figure out when she's possessing someone...
Vampire chapter 7 . 7/11/2012
great story loving in so far :) seems pretty original although i'm no expert

can't say as i like the whole assistant thing one lil bit but it's not my story :) please do keep writing, i'm gonna need something to go onto after this and its sequel xD

I love how well you write in first person and (so far) don't go swapping around as to who's the central character. Can't stand following someone's story only to suddenly have it from another persons perspective, i really can't figure out why so many authors do so, to me that does nothing but kill the immersion... which sucks...
DormDad chapter 10 . 7/10/2012
You must have edited the part about Orpheus out or I completely missed it. I really like your rendition of this. It brings death alive. Now there is a oxymoron! Write On!
Guest chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
Wow that is interesting. Contact with his flesh causes humans to expire. Good work. Write On!
Unyin chapter 1 . 4/5/2008
I read two paragraphs and I was hooked.

Read chapter one, and this is a definite fave.

You, my friend, are a VERY skilled writer.

I love it!

off to read more.
j.m.burford chapter 5 . 6/28/2007
you never did write what happened with Callisto's family and here burial... everyone thinks she is dead..
j.m.burford chapter 2 . 6/28/2007
you change the use of tense in this chapter from being told in first person to being told in third person...this is moving so so quickly... you should try to lengthen your chapters next time as you seem to be full of ideas and wanting to write them down but missing vital information along the way and through the journey...also it seems very childish that Charon would try to strangle the old dead man...
j.m.burford chapter 1 . 6/28/2007
um... i take it from your writting that you are a young person as your writting is not quite mature. I think that you may have gone a little over board with the whole mother's culinary food skils and the dinner anticipation... it just kind of seemed like you were chucking in some words to make it sounds good however, the image didn't make it to my mind. The chapter moves along very quickly, which can be good.. but in this case... we haven't actually been properly introduced to Charon and so there is no atmosphere to the environment of the character and his personality. Anyway, i will stop there and continue reading...
Mass Genocide chapter 14 . 12/16/2006
I like what's happening so far. And this is where he meets the other girl am I correct?

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Mass Genocide chapter 11 . 12/16/2006
Ha! That last bit was funny. So... I don't think I'm going to review for every chapter from now on. How about every 3 or 4? Ok.

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Mass Genocide chapter 10 . 12/16/2006
Ah yes. I remember that Greek tale. It was very good. I liked it a lot. I just have one question: Will Callisto escape Charon's body? And isn't Charon a name for death in an old legend?

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Mass Genocide chapter 9 . 12/16/2006
OH WOW! What if his parents see him in the mirror? Oh dear...

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Mass Genocide chapter 8 . 12/16/2006
OH! Goody! Another reaper!

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Mass Genocide chapter 7 . 12/16/2006
whoa... He died? I can't wait for the next chapter. Oh and you have a few spelling mistakes I should tell you about but other than that the story is going really great...
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