Reviews for Village
Made in U.S.A chapter 1 . 11/20/2004
This is so sad but true. Very well written once more and as usual keep writing.
Teperehmi chapter 1 . 11/20/2004
This really does not make sense to me. Maybe you should say exactly who or what the body is and what happened to it. A lot more emotion is needed. Also watch the rythym next time. It seemed to come and go to me. But other than that, nice work. You have a great idea, just work on it some more.
Broken Melody chapter 1 . 11/20/2004
Um, this is different. The only poety device I see in hear is free hand. It not bad. I kind of like it. But maybe try and put more emotion into it.