I love the way your poems seem like a conversation. Just the little things in them, though I'm not sure if I really liked the "ugh", but it did give the poem a specific flavor. I like it, I'm gonna try to review everything you've updated within the next 24 hours. I don't know if I'll get it done, but I'll at least read it, and your poetry always inspires me to write some. So thanks and I'll try to get some reviews done.

its good. it has a coma after every line, a bit much? try limitating your coma use. otherwise, its good.