|Reviews for Within the Legend of a Hero|
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 17 . 3/12/2008
"all that lay before her was nothing more than dye, paper and imagination."
Wonderful turn of phrase...
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 16 . 3/12/2008
Amelia is my mother. It's uncanny!
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 15 . 3/12/2008
WOO! All hail the sick day! I'm finally getting a chance to catch up on my reading.
I love this little flashback and I desperately want an iccle baby gryphon to cuddle - they sound adorable. Still, the one thing that bothers me (and it's a small point) is the arrows Erik and co. use to stun the poachers. I'm not sure something with a heavy, non-aerodynamic metal end would fly through the air when loosed from a bow. Not really sure what you could use instead though. Sleeping potion on darts? Or I suppose you could have the unit sneak in close and go to pounce, then one of the poachers fires at the big gryphon because of the shock he gets.
Anyways, still really enjoying this. :D
| RandomUser674 chapter 1 . 2/27/2008
This was really good. i don't have time to read anymore right now, but I will, for it IS really good! I'm adding you to my favorite authors list!
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 13 . 4/27/2007
I like this so much! Made me crack a smile.
“Osiris!” she called out, “Mum, Osiris was licking my feet!”
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 10 . 3/22/2007
"Since meeting Erik he had always surprised Maria on a daily basis" - This line says it all for me. I'm about to reveal my seldom shown, soppy and hopelessly romantic side but that's what love's all about. Made me smile a lot.
This chapter seems to show an awful lot of tenderness between the characters and its lovely. Go you!
| Areneth chapter 10 . 12/28/2006
This chapter was good. It was more of a transitioning chapter, which can lead some people to think that it was boring. I liked it though, it means that the story is still going somewhere and still developing into something better than what it is already. This story is awesome, by the way, I'm so glad that I am able to read it :p
| Areneth chapter 9 . 12/22/2006
I'm back for a while :) This was a good chapter, it moved very well. The only issue I found was that it was sloppier than the previous chapters. It had more grammar mistakes than usual. But they were easy to spot, so just rereading through it would find them all. But it was a good chapter, I'm glad I have more time to read it now!
| Frankie Lady of soup chapter 9 . 9/2/2006
Its been a long time since I read anything online but this chapter made it worth the wait. :) I like Robert - he's a good character. Puts me in mind a little of Erik actually. Well, got to go put the kettle on but expect more reviews soon. Thankies for another great chapter!
| Areneth chapter 8 . 8/5/2006
This story is so dark. Hopefully Erik and Maria will find some happiness, or atleast drop their facades so that they can move on in life. I wonder what the pixies will be like! And I'm still waiting for the other story to tie into the main theme, but that probably won't happen for a while. I'll read more later. Adios!
| Areneth chapter 6 . 8/4/2006
It's uncommon for my reviews to have nothing to say to help someone's writing improve. But I consider your writing superior to mine, and the only thing that really annoys me, if anything, are the typos and the times that you sometimes repeat words and stuff like that. Otherwise, everything is written so clearly. Dude, I wish I could do that. Anyways, that's all for now. I'm so tired my eyes are crossing and I'm sure none of these reviews have made any sense at all. ttyl!
| Areneth chapter 5 . 8/4/2006
Wow, this story is cool. I want to say that I like Erik, but he's so mysterious that I can't really say much yet. You are good at giving each character their own personalities. There are so many times when people write stories and make all of their characters have the same voice, but yours doesn't, and it makes your story so much better because of that. You left me with a cliff-hanger so now I have to read more...
| Areneth chapter 4 . 8/4/2006
Your reviews are awesome, thank you. This is an interesting chapter. Unlike many other stories with deep histories, this one is a lot more thoughtful. Usually they aren't as dark either - with all the back-stabbing involved. It will be interesting to see how this chapter holds significance within the story aside from it being just background information. The story as a whole is being developed very well. I'll have to see where it goes, even though I'm taking forever to catch up.
| Areneth chapter 3 . 7/13/2006
Why would they ask him to play something again, and to relive the painful thoughts that go through his head, thoughts sad enough to bring tears to his eyes? I can understand a piece being so passionate on its own to bring tears, but that didn't seem to be the case here. I guess that means I'll have to keep reading... There are so many unanswered questions! It's a good thing, you do well at keeping a reader going to find the answers. Hopefully I'll find them in the later chapters. And I like your style of writing, have I ever told you that? It flows very well, and it fits the piece.
| Areneth chapter 2 . 6/18/2006
I love your writing, it's magnificent. You repeated a word twice in there, but I seriously can't find it now. And I remember a sentence not flowing very well, but I can't find that either. So obviously it isn't too important. Sorry, I'm tired and rambling. It really is an awesome story, I'll attempt to continue reading it, but that's what I said last time and it took me months to come back to it. ANYWAY! I am envious of the way you set the scene and develop your characters, I can't think of any way to improve it at all. I'll stop rambling now, ttyl!