heartbreaking and beautiful. this was very touching. i absolutely loved it.

This is quite possibly the most hearbreakingly beautiful thing I've ever read. I'm currently viewing this through tear-blurred eyes.

To HELL (or perhaps Heaven) with those who scream "Blasphemy" or "Sacreligious"! Simply fantastic. Left me wanting more.

Can't believe only 2 reviews...of course, as you said yourself, blasphemous material...for me, too, Lucifer fascinates me (my friend has a field day with that...but it's tru) this is a very interesting take on why Lucifer left, and frankly, i like it. Can't wait to read the Greek mythology centered one...if you HAVE written it...

This story is so sweet. I love angels. They are so pretty. And no worries, I have no affiliation with any religions, so the blasphemy (of which I didn't catch... *shrug*) was of no concern. Brilliant.

Ah, I'm too lazy to sign in, sorry. I popped over here because I liked your fanfiction, actually. I'm not very big on reading original fiction unless I know the person writing it, but I'm beyond tired and decided to give it a whirl.

I'm very glad I did.

You've got a very unique style of writing, one that I'm quite afraid I'll get addicted to if I stay and read any more stories. With this one there was a bit of tense confusion, but you noted that you knew about it so I won't point it out again.

This one just thrilled me. I love stories about Lucifer. I'm absolutely fascinated by him and all the stories surrounding him and quite honestly I'm not sure I believe that if he existed he would be such a bad sort.

Anyhow, I'd like to offer some praise, as I think you well deserve it.

The passage where Lucifer first finds Azael- beautiful. Absolutely brilliant. For a moment I thought Azael was dead and was quite relieved that he was not. Most of this story just wrenched at my heart-strings but the "I missed you" yanked quite hard. From the surrounding descriptions I can almost hear the soft, tired voice. Very nice.

"He does not fly because he knows Azael will cry if he does." ~~I'll tell you now, my heart leapt right up into my throat at those words. Very good line, very good play on emotion, at showing the loss is more than physical.

"Azael does not regret killing him. Only that he is not here now." ~~A very interesting distinction, thought-worthy. It sets a clear line for the sort of character Azael has.

The part about Azael remembering his own exhile and not regretting it because of anything he did but because of losing Lucifer... beautiful. Gorgeous bit of work there, I loved it.

"There will be prices to pay, Azael knows, and regrets that Lucifer has to pay them." ~~Another line that I loved. It gives a sense that Azael knows what is going on, even though he seems so out of it, so lost. He knows what's going to happen and it seems he's avoiding thinking about it for the moment.

"Lucifer had screamed in agony when Azael’s wings had been stripped. He had fallen silent, weeping, when Azael was cast from Heaven. He swore, solemnly, determinedly, obsessively, that he would find Azael again. No one doubted his word as the most powerful archangel in heaven. Still, many questioned the wisdom of it." ~~That whole bit just... oh light, I couldn't breathe it was just one of those passages where it makes to consider a lot of things. In such a short set of sentences you've managed to encompass so, so much emotion. You've bound together so much of what Lucifer and Azael are in this story, made it hit home. Kudos...

At this point I'm going to say that I really liked how things began to fall into place concerning the past with the other angels and soul mates. In a short amount of time you were well able to express how things played out and at the same time, left a lot to the reader's imagination (and I've quite a vivid one). I like that. You've given more than enough to guide the reader's thoughts, but still left them room to play things about in their own heads. That's a good talent. I liked how everything was interconnected, as well, very nicely done.

"What are my duties in the face of the soul mate you yourself created for me?”" ~~I'm with him on that one...

"Lucifer is not cast from Heaven. He walks away from it. He leaves of his own free will, granted to him by the Lord Creator he has turned from." ~~So, so good. So good.

"whose once pristine wings had been stained inky black by the lack of Light." ~~I've never thought of it that way before, but it makes a lot of sense now that I think about it. Very interesting concept, very nice line.

Overall, I think it was a good piece of writing. I'm glad I took the time to read it and happy to drop a review that is hopefully coherant. It's rather late and night and I'm afraid my spelling and grammar tend to slack off this late. Anyhow, keep up the good writing. It's always nice to find someone who can actually do it well. .~

~Sparkle