the ending is surprisingly strong and simple in comparing to the rest.

the "millions years...or two...or so it seems" it appreciated and e(a?)ffective.

i'm a bit unclear on the purpose of the question mark after "you to life," but i'm not sure whether that's an actual problem or just my personal misunderstanding.

the whole part about your lungs works very well.

overall, great. very emotional and real life.

review me if you get a chance,nev.

Hey time no is actually pretty good. I liked your format. Email me sometime, let me know whats new in your life. It's certainly been a while.

Elise