Awesome ending! I loved the story. If I were you I would have taken it a little slower, but its not my sotory. And I must say, the name choices of this fif were a little erie. They are all ones that I know very, very well.

Wow! That is so beautiful. I loved it. Please add on. I hope she finds her bracelet.

Reviewer #1! Reviewer #1! Yaa! Lol...I do like this story so far. It is has a good story line, although I am not yet aware of where you are taking it. I hope you don't give it up, because I believe that you can really make it into something if you want watch the word repitition, and maybe try and be a little more discriptive. Your dialogue is strong, but I think you could really make it GREAT with more discriptions. Do keep it up, it's quite good.