Reviews for The Bounty Hunter: Paradox One
Sally-andersonn chapter 1 . 12/15/2005
The idea is good (the process of talon page becoming a bounty hunter.

Go into it a bit more. You jumped over some points in the storyline.

I would like the DNA thing explained more.

The second last paragraph made me shudder. THe first paragraph too. They were a little stuck up. The last paragraph seems unconnected to the rest of the chapter.

The events were excellent. Except for the bounty hunter part. This is enough for a good story, not just one chapter. I enjoyed reading it very much.
Jaron Davis chapter 1 . 12/29/2004
I have read the first two paragraphs so far, it seems interesting, I will definately read on, though again, I think you need to read up on star wars a bit more, but if you didn't know as much about star wars as I do you wouldn't notice, so good job :P
Chris Redfield chapter 1 . 11/28/2004
Hey man, this is pretty interesting, try using some smaller words next time, but you got me interested...keep it up!