|Reviews for Priests and Pistols|
| Chasmodai Blue chapter 2 . 5/15/2008
So long since update...
But review none the less. Much love for the style man...it's very smooth and detailed without being too obnoxiously long-winded. Also, the topic is pretty unique, as are the characters. I like Nicolas. He's very realistic: not too bad, not too righteous.
I hope you update one day. And if you don't, I liked it anyway.
| Elianah chapter 2 . 4/18/2007
So, you haven't updated in over a year? I'm still gonna review. Interesting story. And your characters don't talk like 50-year-old college professors. I'm impressed. Good story.
| DarkSorceress chapter 1 . 3/15/2005
You've caught me in a very hyper mood...bear with me...
"Imposiblé"...I get to learn Spanish...yipee...
"What’s he gonna do, have God strike us down?”...You never know...but then, I don't think God has smited anybody since the old testament...
“Shit, he got a knife!” ...same thoughts here...I guess it pays off not to be a typical goody two shows choir boy...
“Sister Catherine,” the both muttered and took off running"..."they"...mind you, I am sure that you find many errors like that in my story, lol...its easier to see someone else's error on someone else's story rather than on your own...
"He didn’t have to say what mess. Nicolas understood. He wants me to wash the blood off the cobblestones. He doesn’t want the parishioners to be asking questions."...Nicolas understands and so do we- you can take out the last two sentences...(I am bad in this respect as well)
So Raul let a white boy into the gang...I really wonder what he is up to...Ohh, the intrigue (sp)
Great introduction chapter. Your writing style is smooth and fluid, and you are great with your dialogue .I should also add that I am very happy that you didn't have the gang members speaking like...
"I ain't carrin' no drugs"
Even though I suspect they may have been in your head, slang is almost impossible to read, and the slang terms you did put in were easily intelligable.
The way you wrote this has me suspecting that you have actually seen this...if you haven't it means you are a damn good writer (and if you have seen in, you still are a damn good writer anyways)...You wrote it for an audience that has no prior knowledge of gangs, which has an excellent decision.
P.S. Chapter 5 of Dorian is going up tonight...I just have to check over for typos and fix the first paragraph (what the hell was I thinking when I wrote it, only God knows)
| zeusfluff chapter 2 . 12/23/2004
Hey this is a great story! I love it that you have Hispanic characters in this story! I'm half Mexican so I can understand a little better. Thanks for a great story! ~Melissa~
| lili brik chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
wow, i'm glad you left a review on my antediluvian story-otherwise i would have probably never stumbled across your work. :-)
it's rare to find stories on this site with believable hispanic characters...i'm half-mexican, so it think it's kinda cool ...that aside, this is altogether an awesome piece. the plot moves on smoothly, the action is well-written-some spanish thrown in-i like it.
i've heard of 'many waters', but i guess i'll wait to read it until i'm done with my story so i don't unintentionally take any ideas from l'engle.
| ChrstnWrtr chapter 1 . 11/30/2004
Awesome story! I like it. Write more!
| Kage Chikara chapter 1 . 11/30/2004
Have I mentioned lately that I worship you? A great start, provoking interest and wonder. You make everything more complicated. Your style has gotten much more polished than before, but it stays the same in emotional context. Your characters are always sympathetic...heck, I even liked Raul! Very, very good.