|Reviews for The Room: Prologue|
| Kupo chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
Wow, you posted this a long time ago.
Well, I just saw it.
And. I, um, read it. A...long time ago.
Are you perked up very mucho?
Post your next part! Both of them! Or maybe just the one that you liked! T_T
| Tasiha chapter 1 . 11/29/2004
Hmph... it's an interesting excerpt. I like the juxtaposition of the character's thoughts with the narration of the character's actions; normally that gets messy, but it works very well because it is such a short piece.
I'd like to see a little more description; the room isn't all that clear, the sunlight could definitely use a few rich lines that make it powerful; you could SHOW through more description the effect of the room on her, or the effect of the sunlight on her.
Just a thought!