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Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 12/24/2004
Lot of powerful material in this piece. Feels like you wrote it, then sort of wanted to qualify it, but still wanted to get it out. I recommend you just make it hard and brutal and spit it out—then let it tell its own story. Just like a kid, that grows up and walks in and out of the house when they want to (hopefully 'cause they like being related to you). m
hmmmmm chapter 1 . 12/6/2004
oh, wow. that was just painfully good. very emotional, very lifelike. i love the way you work in allusions to jesus && bulimia. just a beautiful piece in its anger.
Escapist chapter 1 . 12/1/2004
I'm partial to "fuck you, nana," I disagree with your last reviewer, because I love this poem.

why should i care about you/when you don't give a/FUCK/about anyone (but yourself)/about anything (but your alcohol)/about your 2-sizes too small pants/that make you look pinched and uglier

and then an awesome line: (a woman that wasn't worth her weight to begin with)

It glares off the page.
Marth Azumi chapter 1 . 11/30/2004
Hmm, it wasn't that bad, and it was a good way to get your rage out, but it just seemed more like a rant than a poem, which was a slight than that, it's alright.