I LOVE IT!

This could really be a beautiful piece if you made it longer and really explored and expanded on what you have already written. Nice work overall though.

~Arafax~

I liked this. Short with open discussion to the meaning. Such a mysterious yet powerful feeling to it. Like looking into someone's eyes and knowing there is something behind there that you can't quite understand. M... mystery. I love it. :)

Short but very powerful.

The last line is perfect!

And extremly good poem

I kind of like the short poems, because explaining your feelings accuratly in few phrases is true art. Very nice poem, it reminds me of some own experiences.

Its too short to get your point accross. Its like writing a story like "Once upon a time in a land far far away, the end" It barely gives you a mental image of the poem before it ends.

Thoughtful and well written poem. ¿Or will you laugh? Knowing you're still alive, and have a heart and soul to witness life. m