i think you ended it beautifully.

and i adored this line:

"It is a Kiss with a capital letter in front of it, a kiss to end all kisses. There never was a kiss in the world before this one. He is saying things to me with his mouth, and without having to turn on my brain, I know what every single one of them is."

just like an old movie. to have or have not, casablanca. for some reason i couldn't get bogart&bacall out of my head while reading this!

thanks for sharing. (may want to change the story status to complete?)

Well I'm glad the chapter ended on a slightly good note but sad that she just abruptly walked away from Ian. :( But, I also really like how open and vague the ending is cause we can just imagine everything from there on. :) Awesome story. :D

That'd be so goddamn awsome!

oh god, no! you can't just leave it like that. and there's no way she can leave poor ian like that, that's harsh. ahh well, cya later ~ Alenor.

Good God you finally finished it! Kudos! The ending was nice and anti-climactic btw, I lurved it!

hmm

it does leave it open for sequals

but they break up?

oh that's so sad

(

that sucks

i liked it though

sad

but i hear a sequal haha

izzie

Hey. I just read your full story. Today. Took me like 6 hours. Haha.

There isn't much to pick at, your plot is great, and I loved the whole story.

Just a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Now that your finished, I advise you go back and edit these, to make it even better!

Also, your ["] and ['] in the last few chapters have been either replaced by those square boxes or not there entirely. May want to fix that too, its confusing.

But all in all, congratulations on a great story!

Hey, I know you said that you no longer consider this a good example of your writing, however I was wondering if you're going to be making a sequel? Perhaps? I'm actually begging that you do...because I could see the perfect plot for a follow up. Oh yeah, by the way you're music taste is amazing. When I saw the lyrics to Magazine, I freaked out. Internally. Because they're my favorite band. Anyway, really good story and keep up the excellent work!

:) sweet and cute.

oh interesting!

wow.

it's done.

bravo.

great story. loved the end.

aw! that's so sad! but i loved it. :)

Thanks for finally finishing this. I'm not thrilled with the ending, a four years later they're getting back together after college epilogue would have been my preference, but you did a great job with complex characters. Thanks for sharing your imagination with us.

You say we should expect an epilogue soon. Is your idea of soon more than a year? XD

aw awesome awesome story, there was the occasional spelling and grammer mistake but nothing that cant be overlooked. some of your characters seemed too cliched for my liking like gemma but the main characters were nicely developed. btw you have great taste in music, i wouldve loved to see more of lorne though, he rocks!