Reviews for One Hundreth of a Second
Hidden Flowers chapter 1 . 8/19/2008
How OLD are you? This is amazingly deep for someone your age. A little rough around the edges, but better than my writing.
Sarah Elizabeth Julia chapter 1 . 5/14/2005
pretty good.
Aetis chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
This story is pretty good, but it could definitely be better.

First of all, try to avoid using numberals in stories. in other words, instead of 2,0, write two thousand. I suppose it makes sense to use numerals for the 200-meter dash, but personally, I'd try to avoid it.

Also, I'd try to beef up the story between dialogue a little. It's fine as it is, but the dialogue's completely carrying the story. Try to give better descriptions, especially of the accident at the beginning.

Also, try to seperate the story of what he's typing from the story of him typing it.

Other than that, I noticed a few grammatical inaccuracies, but not many.

All in all, this is a very well written story.
melody mama chapter 1 . 12/3/2004
Wow, that is great. I know personally what it is like to overcome personal hardships. I really like this. And its great to see a new fictionpress like myself. I am an active fanfiction person myself. Keep writing, you're pretty good.