|Reviews for Heroes of the Earth and Stars|
| JoseJavi chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
Kickass! Great beggining. I don't know if it's because I love video games, or because I'm dying for a game similar to this one to come out, but I really liked this story. Suggestions- On the ninth paragraph, you write: "These were all the people he recognized as players in the game “The Heroes of the Earth and Stars”. There could be more, but these were the ones he recognized." It sounds kinda awkward. I suggest you write:"These were all the people he recognozed as players in the game. There could be more, but these were the ones he noticed"Please continue this sounds kinda awkward.
| Lady Doral chapter 1 . 12/6/2004
Really good start. Can't wait to see more. Thanks for reviewing my story! Gotta go, 'tis not good to read and review stories during class! update this soon, pls!