Another one I forgot to point out... Lori has become Martha a couple of times now.

I think you might want to go back and edit some of this... in chapter one you said you had to edit and such (I assume you also changed the names) well, every now and then you have things like this: in chapter one you introduced Nate as Nathan Hoffman, in chapter 8 Sara calls him Nate Broadbridge. The only things that shows that it's the same person in Jesse's reaction. Also in chapter 7 you refered to Jesse's family as the Price family, when in chapter one he's Jesse a question about chapter one... what is Toki supposed to mean? "Toki wasn't so bad" and 'the Toki kids' I can't see any way to interpret this... unless it's meant as something refering to their middle school years, which for anyone reading this story without any explainations is just confusing. If it is referencing their middle school years maybe you could clarify a little more as to what it means?Other than that, and a few other minor flaws that are easily overlooked, it's a good story so far... I can't wait to see what happens.

Rei

OMG! I just finished reading 'from heaven to hell in four months' and it was so good! The last chapter was so good and i couldn't stop laughing when Jesse wasn't fully awake and told Sei about them having sex and her screaming! lmao well basically good story!

~xXTaintedInkXx

Haahahhaha Your the most funniest writer i have ever laid my eyes upon! ahah I must add you to my favs! eheehhe

Oh my god! When I read that I went and flung myself on my bed and screamed. THAT WAS AWESOME! You better write the sequel or I will be most upset! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!Bye bye now!

i loved this story loved it loved it loved it and you did one of the best lemons i ever read

Just to tell you, you mispelled definately twice. I think... Me liek horrible english.

You've written at the end "He glared at him and then stalked off to her own room" - i think you mean "She glared at him and then stalked off to her own room"

bravo, bravo! beautiful ending and all- nice- i demand a sequel! haha!

ahahahahaha! hilarious! chris and adam are awesome! can't wait to read more!

Hey, that was oh so adorable. Aww, kind of makes me wish i was male...and gay.

Your adoring fan X

I'm still in shock, everytime I read about american high-schools, I got _ Is it REALLY like this? _ (everyone seems so immature o.O) "Amy had also had sex at least six times if not more": is this so unusual or are they under 15?This sentence: "Adam had dark brown hair and eyes." sounds a bit awkward, almost out of place. (Just describing a person like that makes it a little untasty so to speak, and it's VERY easy to forget how they looked like.) I'm not sure if you meant it this way, I guess you did since it's a humourous story; the characters are very Mary do you care if people find out? BE STRONG FIGHTO FIGHTO XDThe plot seems good so far, the new guy makes one want to read further XD And you also have a strong point in dialogues. Oh some advertisement for my own sucky fics too XDD please R&R!

condoms make good water balloons. good writing. can't wait until they KISS! I WANT THEM TO GET TOGETHER AND LOVE EACH OTHER TILL DEATH DO THEM PART!

YAY! YOU FINISHED ITT AND WITH A WONDERFUL LEMON! BWAHAHA THAT WAS AWESOME. AND GO YOU, YOU GREAT WRITER! LOL ; CAN'T WAIT TIL THE SEQUEL! XD

I am much ashamed to say that I found this amusing, at the very least. I detest those fragile type characters in general, but I liked Jesse well enough. Bleh. Enjoyable story.