|Reviews for Fairytales|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/20/2006
In a far place where unrevealed lives heart,
Without pretense or falsely contrived art,
With a bare simplicity some call dull,
In that Eden can love's bloom ground its start.
Without any preconceptions yet formed,
Errant lust true love's citadel hard stormed,
Fierce its trebuchet all barriers broke,—
¿But, will Victory keep heart long conformed?
Undoubtedly heart knew what it longed for,—
On pedestal a beauty to adore,—
A gorgeous figure with a sparkling smile,—
Now,—transformed Gorgon,—still remains a bore.
It started out without even a hope,
Of course, a man is always quite a dope,
Unrealizing what could or should be,—
Now that her fairy touch is gone,—just mope.
p.s. Thx for ur thoughts. A few quatrains for you. m
| dancingintherain chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
aww...fairytales, how can you not dream about them? it must've been so hard on you!
n i really love your poem! it flows VERY nicely, n im really impressed!
| philoslove chapter 1 . 1/4/2005
Pretty and quite heart-wrenching.
| lifescrewsusall chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
very nicely organized & good rhythm. this is one of your best i'd say. i think it's a feeling that lots of people feel but way to put it into lines.
| grim-dreamer chapter 1 . 12/14/2004
What an anti-climatic ending! The last two lines don't need to be there though... Without them the ending would be more powerful...
| Taos Ardew chapter 1 . 12/13/2004
Yet again wow. It starts happy and then it becomes sad, and the change is subtle yet again. It gives it to you leadingly in small ammounts and I that. Keep on writing them!
| Lidless Eye chapter 1 . 12/13/2004
Actually, the ending wasn't all that bad. The poem seems to work as is. Nice!
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/13/2004
;_; That was so sad. Bitter sweet kinda. XP
~ Noelle ~
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
i like this, as usual, amazing works!
| graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
wow, i love the relation to the horse kicking u off...it goes so deep. nice poem!
| u-will-never-know chapter 1 . 12/12/2004
I like the whole concept you've used on fairytales, it fits really well. Well done.
| xHannahx chapter 1 . 12/11/2004
i know that feeling. as a friend of mine said today - "men are bastards darling - who needs them?" mind you he is so gay...its a beautiful poem, i love the imagery. and its always nice to dream it'll happen for real some .
| myno chapter 1 . 12/10/2004
but fairytales don’t existat least not the oneswith happy endings excellent, i live that bit. in the end you missed a space between withthese, but it's a pretty good poem.
| NP user chapter 1 . 12/10/2004
my god...that's so sad...so real...but get up there...maybe prince charming will find you again!:-)~Nicole
| ApplesCM chapter 1 . 12/10/2004
Aww.. I really like this poem. Its great. :)