Great chapter- I love love your writing style. I get all caught up inside the words like there's nothing else going on around me. I look for that. I like this description- "gypsy jazz" Perfectly descriptive without overdosing on words.

(As an afterthought, I must mention that fedoras are my favorite type of hats.)

I read this awhile ago, but just now realized I never reviewed, and this definitely deserves reviews. This is so beautiful- it all just flows together great. I love "his you-missed-the-written-revolution-so-tango-with-the-music-evolution fingers."

This is phenomenal. You're an amazing poet! Don't know what to say, except your work is inspiring. Keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next chapter.

wow...when do i get an update? cause this is a gorgeous story

I love how you use language in this. How you set the poetry up as narrative and the narrative as poetry. And it's so successful! It's just gorgously written! It's rare that I'm as involved with how the words in a story are said as I am with what those words are saying. This is brilliant, just brilliant! I really can't get over how incredibly stunning this is!

Wow! This was so breath-taking! Update soon! I can't wait to see where this prologue takes the story!

Wow. These are incredible writings. There's a type of vague air about them, but you word everything so well. You could make this into a published literary art; it's that amazing.

Please update soon!

- Lithely

holy crap, you're alive! you're stories are always gorgeously written, well done

Oh, wow! Awesome story! Why did you just end? Update...PUHLEEZE! I'm begging you! All of your writings are brilliant!

When I saw that you had updated, I swear I made a really over dramatic gaspy happy noise. This is awesome, I really hope you start posting frequently again. Missed you!

wow, very nice

I was beginning to think I'd never hear of you again! Just a couple of days ago I was thinking of you and I looked on your page and saw how long it'd been since you'd updated anything and your profile hadn't been updated since December and I just felt so awful! But now you're back. :D That made my day. Anyway, review. "Blue hair, blue eyes -you're so sweet you make me cry" I love that line. The whole thing is really rich with imagery and really fascinating. I love how the first and last lines tie in so nicely. Wonderful work, never stop writing! (And pleaser don't disappear again for so long! You were greatly missed.)

When I saw you updated, I nearly died. Where've you been? Lol, fp hasn't been the same without you :) This is a gorgeous story, the way you describe characters never ceases to amaze me! I've updated my profile page with my e-mail, why don't you e-mail me and we can chat? I've missed your updates like woah!

hm...that was interesting

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful, and absolutely heartwrenching- I cried at the end, when I thought he was leaving without her.

~T.K.~