I don't know how I missed this update and I apologize for my late review.

fantastic. I probably always say that but I always mean it and I especially mean it this time. the description in this was... I can't even describe it. I'm so glad that he's taking him with her.

but tell me: is this the end? it seemed like it could be but it also seemed like it could keep going. I hope there's more...

i love this...it's so beautiful. my world seems blue now .

Wow. Awesome. I wish I had Raphael:) Blue hair has always been my weakness...

wow, that was such a great story...so smooth and wonderful...i LOVE it! its amazing how your poetry is there in you writing...im awed and speechless!

-sigh- That was wonderful. This story is so... enchanting. BLUE HAIR? -grin- I love blue hair! I'm thinking of dying mine blue... big change from the innocent blonde, though. I’m not leaving you. Why am I leaving you? I never want to leave you. I never will leave you. There is nothing, nothing, nothing that would cause that. I am not leaving you. Why am I leaving you?” Wow. That was amazing. So... sweet. I love the emphasize on blue, by the way. Gotta love blue. Blue's the best. The ending was so nice and the last line was perfect. GREAT work, keep writing this- I'm falling in love with it!

Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous. I love this to death so much that it's not even funny...mostly because I know a boy who plays word games like Raphael. I like the combination of poetry and fiction meshed into one piece because it wouldn'd seem right any other way.

Rilo is such a great name... it reminds me of chocolate. I guess because of Rolos or something. Anyway, I love it. And I loved this, as I already said. Beautiful. Great job.

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(Once again, you leave me happily speechless.)

I don't see why you don't have more reviews, your work is so amazing.I loved the poem and I was really glad to see that you were basing a story around it, and also a little curious to see where it would go. and I love it! I love the whole sugar bit but my favorite part was definitely when he kisses her and she's kind of musing about him and she's thinking that he tastes like sunday nights and pinstripes. I loved that. your characters are amazing, I can actually picture them. please keep working on this! I love it!

I really love the way this reads like a poem. I really, really loved the line, "I everything him more than I've everythinged anyone else before." I can totally relate to that. You captured it perfectly. Update really soon!Have you forgotten about Blood On Our Sneakers? Because I haven't... and I'm impatient! I want/need/adore/obsess over/love/everything Coner!

This is absolutely one of the most beautiful things I've ever read! I wouldn't change a thing! Even the centering of the text...I like it. It makes the whole thing feel like reading a poem.

Anyhoo, please PLEASE PLEASE write more!

I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT

bonjour, searching the net and finding things like this makes me happy on a monday is very clever, based around the poem (which is also excellent), and really well written, so far.i feel a "favourite" for this page is fitting.