I need a little help with the sub-plot(s)... Those are still a little too mystic and off the wall for me.

This chapter was very intense. You have an amazing talent for writing suspense, switching between scenes and thoughts. Etrayos is a marvelous character, especially with Vorchay.

Is Isyrad going to come back? He was a fun one.

SHE KILLS THE HORSE? That just ain't fair. Though the battle scene sucked me in, that was awesome.

Ah, do I sense a new love interest? Excellent. I share the same feelings about Vorchay as some of the other reviewers...I didn't really understand her at first, but I feel that this chapter let her seem a little bit more like a human being.

And thank you for your lovely review! Unfortunately my computer was stolen, so I lost all the material that I had on that story that I hadn't yet posted. But I shall soon start working on it again, since there is at least one person reading it.

I like your story but I don't think I have the guts to finish it.

Hmm... wel rounded critique... fine. I think that the fight scene was not essential, but was a good character development that proved useful. I like it so far, I shall read on...

Wow! So much has happened in such a little time! The fight scene was... whew! C'est excellent! I really enjoy your action sequences.

And Etrayos at the end made me adore him even more!

I'm in the middle of cleaning, so I'll keep this short.

Thank you for updating so swiftly. I am anxious to see what comes next.

I like Etrayos... I can't even tell you why, but he kicks ass. Maybe because he is so "lofty" in the face of thing that would have other people pissing in their pants.

I liked Vorchay in this chapter. She seems so much more real to me now.

I usually can get into the heads of certain characters, and I couldn't do that with Vorchay for the longest time...

But I can inch my way in a little, but I'm reluctant to. You always manage to surprise me, so I'll wait to make sure I don't get too attached.

I don't believe it's the "duplicity of her character" that confuses me. I'm still unsure. Give me a few more chapters to decide. ;)

And I almost forgot about Pehron! She has potential. I really would enjoy learning more about her...

finally, my buddha that was long enough. *Brandishes keyboard menacingly*

I don't really have anything to say cept it was good. Nothing particularly caught my eye, but I interested to know why raedoch was so affected my vorchay's show.

Feel better. Last thing we need is more illnesses/injuries around. Take care. RP will be done by tomorrow!

-Natalie

You are alive! I thought you were lost forever, and I would never again read anything so wonderful as your beautiful stories. And now I must wait another month for the next chapter? Though, I do understand what you're going through...in fact, I really shouldn't be spending time reading fictionpress...but I'm addicted, what can I say.

Dudette! You updated! I am as happy as a clam... Well, as happy as something that is frequently eaten can be... ;)

I'm understanding Vorchay a little better with each chapter. Yet there is still so much that I don't understand. You, my friend, are the queen of multifaceted characters. They are layered. You make them human. There are SO many stories with one dimensional MAIN characters, but even minor characters in your fics are intricate. They are more than just names with actions attached to them.

I like how Raedoch reacted to Vorchay after the battle. He lost a bit of his innocence after seeing her fight. I suppose anyone would.

Vorchay’s fear and hatred of that fear is something that bothers me. I don’t really understand it fully, and I guess that is what is troubling me so much. Maybe I need to see it in action more so I can begin to fully understand it… That was a hint, you know…

In your other stories there are many characters, but I got to know them all. I don’t feel like I know these characters. There are a lot of them, but that isn’t the problem. They weren’t introduced too fast, but it seems like you need to give each of them more attention or “face-time.” That was also a hint…

I am still adoring this, and I shall wish the ulcers away with my magic powers. When I get them. And I will get them. I will.

Also… BLUE! YAY! NEW STORY! HOLY SHIT! YAY! WHEW! HAHAHAH! WHEW! YAYNESS! EEK!

And I’m done…

I am very sad that you have not updated this yet... I am stuck with bad to mediocre crap, and I'm beginning to lose faith. Please, help me regain my faith...

Perhaps you could draw a basic map of everything? o.o; I like it.

~*Miso

Ouch. x.x That is no good... ;_; The hair! *goes to next chappie~*

~*Miso

(XD This does have some funny spots in it from lack of editing) Oh noes ;_; I'm glad Avin didn't die... Oh, yeah, Vorchay, too. It's good that the main character is alive. *shifty look*

*goes to next chapter*

~*Miso