|Reviews for The Seven Treasures of Arginail|
| Ski Aer chapter 1 . 3/16/2007
Heck, I know that I have the same problem sometimes, but maybe you could make it flow a bit more. As is, there's a statement period. It would make a more engaging and easier read if you could link some sentences together.
I like your action scenes but at the same time they lack details and go by quickly.
Don't get me wrong, I like it, but it says here at the bottom of the screen that I should offer constructive critism.. Could I get some from you also?
| Kantessa chapter 1 . 12/15/2004
Dont make me do this.
First, use SEPERATE PARAGRAPHS. Im not sure why you didnt already, or perhaps its something wrong with my computer, but the way i'm seeing it, you have only ONE paragraph in your entire chapter. Change that, please.
And that's all i will say for now.