Reviews for Forest
zuvalupa chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Wow! That was really amazing! Well written! I liked it alot!
Desumegami chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
great story. but how could a jaguar knock over a tree?
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
Wow! I really like this poem! I love the rhyming! You've written it very well!-Anna :)
alias-inferno chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
I like your message, it's interesting to note how you know the forest well. My only concern is the rhythm of the piece. At certain lines, you seem to be forcing words out and others you seem to be missing some. The line refering to the animals oblivion seems to have too many beats to it and throws off the rest of the poem. I think you should have kept to the style at the begining of the poem where you go subject, coma, verb had a nice flow. I hope I wasn't too hard on you. You're welcomed to do the same to me.