|Reviews for Nighttime|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 1/31/2005
What did you tell me?
That you were over him? Or,
Maybe you'd kill him.
I'm all mixed up now,
About genders and tenses,
& Why people love.
Fair heart broken now,
Will yellow-green spring renew?
Butterfly meadows, . . .
Flitting up and down,
I can't talk of heart,
Lost that jewel long ago,-
Excised dagger red.
Did it hurt? They ask,
When she ripped it out your chest,-
With her soft sweet kiss.
Youth's heart did digress,
Young heart pulled raw from tigress,
Such pain & distress, . . .
At you fair, gentle mistress,
Coward gun blast propelled stress.
| graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 12/23/2004
short n sweet...luv the way it flows together
| u-will-never-know chapter 1 . 12/22/2004
i love the format! and the words are so strong too
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
Thats sweet. Touching. - Cute but angsty.
~ Noelle ~
| Ivriniel chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
I can fully relate to your poem. I like the way how it is so short but says so much and contains so many emotions from the speaker
| catseyeview chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
YES! This is the feeling of a broken heart!
| Torn Altair chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
i like this. very real and raw emotion
| karmakaze chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
That's true, about nighttime provoking the worst of the sad thoughts. Great job.
| nine iron chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Beautiful, reminds me of a song, cannot remember artist or track name. I got my CRW book off amazon. Quite cheap and worth every penny. There is even a poem about me in it!
There are some beautiful works in there. Keep writing, I am becoming hooked!
| ApplesCM chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Another sad and powerful one. :( I'm sorry, it must be tough. You do a nice job of showing how you feel. :(
| myno chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
that is... incredibly powerful. One of your best, though its so simple. and yes, they really do need to add a brokenheart category- and a death category, for that matter.
| JC-Saved-Me chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Yup, so true, it really is hard...*sighs and wipes a tear from her eye* Good job, as always.
| bleak nights in tokyo chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
Lovely! I like the format and style. :)
| CrUcIfIeD bY tHe DeViL chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
I hate all my stuff actually...Very rarely do I actually LIKE what I write.