Reviews for Nighttime
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 1/31/2005
What did you tell me?

That you were over him? Or,

Maybe you'd kill him.


I'm all mixed up now,

About genders and tenses,

& Why people love.


Fair heart broken now,

Will yellow-green spring renew?

Butterfly meadows, . . .


Flitting up and down,

Dragonflies elliptical,

Iridescent sun.


I can't talk of heart,

Lost that jewel long ago,-

Excised dagger red.


Did it hurt? They ask,

When she ripped it out your chest,-

With her soft sweet kiss.


Youth's heart did digress,

Young heart pulled raw from tigress,

Such pain & distress, . . .

At you fair, gentle mistress,

Coward gun blast propelled stress.
graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 12/23/2004
short n sweet...luv the way it flows together
u-will-never-know chapter 1 . 12/22/2004
i love the format! and the words are so strong too
poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
Thats sweet. Touching. - Cute but angsty.

~ Noelle ~
Ivriniel chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
I can fully relate to your poem. I like the way how it is so short but says so much and contains so many emotions from the speaker
catseyeview chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
YES! This is the feeling of a broken heart!
Torn Altair chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
so truthful
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
i like this. very real and raw emotion
karmakaze chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
That's true, about nighttime provoking the worst of the sad thoughts. Great job.
nine iron chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Beautiful, reminds me of a song, cannot remember artist or track name. I got my CRW book off amazon. Quite cheap and worth every penny. There is even a poem about me in it!

There are some beautiful works in there. Keep writing, I am becoming hooked!

Nine Iron
ApplesCM chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Another sad and powerful one. :( I'm sorry, it must be tough. You do a nice job of showing how you feel. :(

*~keep Writing~*
myno chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
that is... incredibly powerful. One of your best, though its so simple. and yes, they really do need to add a brokenheart category- and a death category, for that matter.
JC-Saved-Me chapter 1 . 12/18/2004
Yup, so true, it really is hard...*sighs and wipes a tear from her eye* Good job, as always.

bleak nights in tokyo chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
Lovely! I like the format and style. :)
CrUcIfIeD bY tHe DeViL chapter 1 . 12/17/2004
I hate all my stuff actually...Very rarely do I actually LIKE what I write.