|Reviews for The Phone and My heart|
| breezy nostrils chapter 1 . 10/7/2005
Sad...I particularly liked the last stanza. Btw, my fave poems by you are Plums, and Winter in the Park.
| lifescrewsusall chapter 1 . 5/16/2005
powerful metaphor / imagery. good poem
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/2/2005
phone clips out your voice,
gestures are not visible,—
still you break my heart.
this little speaker,
that buzzes bones in my ear,
¿is it truly you?
¿why not face-to-face?
that i could love a coward,—
hurts more than love lost.
into a see-saw,
you turn daily with false words,—
but, i, believed them.
| philoslove chapter 1 . 1/4/2005
There seems to be this theme of suspending, for instance (first) the telephone, then the heart. If I was really heartless and wanted to suggest a funny title, I was thinking... I Need A Cordless Phone. But anyway, I like the way it ended abruptly, without revealing what actually happened or happened later.
| alors chapter 1 . 12/25/2004
Very strong feeling and imagery. Nice work!
| graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 12/23/2004
at a loss for words...like the way u related the whole thing to the phone...well done!
| hiding behind amber eyes chapter 1 . 12/23/2004
i like the comparison! ive never heard of myno but i like ur poem! lol
| u-will-never-know chapter 1 . 12/22/2004
Ah this is cool, not that i'd expect anything less from you ;). Nice metaphor
| Kalopsia chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
this poem, i must say, is true poetry. keep writing like this and you'll be a famous poet someday.
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/21/2004
-V Well done my friend. P I love your poetry. _ It's deep but seems so simpl and clean. A message within it. But it seems to hide. (
| xHannahx chapter 1 . 12/20/2004
i think a lot of people can relate to this. my friend born-again has one similar - you should check him out. the poem is called alone. i love the emotion expressed in ur poem and the simple way you do it. beautiful. Han.
| catseyeview chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
love the metaphor here!
| ApplesCM chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
Nice! Keep writing!
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
im not sure i like this as much. i dunno. smthg bout it. its good though, no doubt bout that.
| karmakaze chapter 1 . 12/19/2004
I like this too.