Reviews for Summer
Archia chapter 1 . 9/22/2012
Ah dear summer, and just around the corner too. I agree with you on this, that is summer and it is such a wonderful. I'm not sure if you're aware that this is one straight line instead of broken up. Nice poem.
lookingwest chapter 1 . 3/14/2010
Wow, great simplicity in this. I like your decision, which I hope was intentional, to leave the first line with no period and cap "The". It really made me look twice and I like how it flows right into the next sentence. It's very almost, well, experimental. And I'm a huge fan of experimental writing, so that was a plus! Great idea. Love you end the lines with a period, it really gives it definite finality.
jadedmari chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
Nice haiku-the flow is good and the senses are utilized. However, you need to put it in haiku form, because at the moment, it looks more like an oddly punctuated sentence.
heartbrokensoul chapter 1 . 1/10/2005
You might want to edit that. Summer honestly sucks. Every one is so happy with their summer love, that is why summer sucks.
ysgrave chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
you left me alonegone to become who you areand this is how i know

i miss you