Interesting.

Looking forward to more. :)

~Twilight Starr~

Great beginning. It caught my attention and made me want to read more.

Good luck with writing and this story. :)

~Twilight Starr~

Nice idea for a story. I like it. But, I like a lot of stories. :P

Whoa... (take 3)Very good. I look forward to seeing new chapters soon. You have a gift of revealing the truth about things. You look deeper than the surface. Very good job. Keep it up!

You know I love it but I somehow think it would be better as a stand alone. Don't explain anything...leave it up to us to guess and ponder. That's what makes it so beautiful. Dead, and morbid, and yet so NOTHING.

this is so strange. i like it

omgwoahwow(and variations thereof)how fucking excellenthow truehow AMAZING:we are not worthy

Quite an intiguing piece. I like the fact that it could go in any direction. Which sadly for you it may be hard to choose that direction.

Anyhoo, I liked the story line and where it's going. Nice Work

-gangster-dolly

Wow...nice. Really well written. Maybe it would have been more affective if it was shorter. Just an idea.

Hehe; I think you like death/pain more than I do Sarah!

I really enjoyed it, but maybe in the update you could tell the audience why exactly she felt this way. Just a thought.

-Emily

i wanna keep readin'! more story!

I think it's going to be really good! The only thing I'd like you do to is read over yor work to catch some of your spelling/grammar mistakes. I noticed a few. Anyway, great job!

Definitely teh kind of intro to get a reader hooked. Cant wait to see where it leads.

Hmm... this is awesome so far. I cant wait to see what happens. I bet the reactions on everyone's faces when she said that one word, "Dead", I bet they were surprised. I'll be checking for updates

Oo! My interest is caught!