really great use of repetition here, sometimes that can make a poem boring but here it works REALLY well, i used some risky repetition in my poem "Crimson Tears" the "falling star" was my fave line cause i can kinda see the words falling downv as more is revealed, really like this , x weasel within x

this had a wonderful flow! Keep up the good work

each line beautifully transitions you to take another step on the ladder of memory. Real nice writing.

DRotk inspires alot doesnt it?great poem!