Reviews for Believe in us |
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Areneth chapter 1 . 3/11/2006 Hey! This is a good poem! I like how it flows and the atmosphere it creates. I liked the last line, though the whole thing is powerful. And thank you for your reviews! You are awesome. |
Quaviver chapter 1 . 2/22/2006 Forgive me if I digress sappily. I'm not a fan of paladins, I admit. I have had very limited experience with the idea. Most of the references to paladins I've ever encountered have gone through the tender hands of the Baldur's Gate games and the Dragonlance series, and those tend to portray paladins as self-righteous, uncompromising, and holier-than-thou. When I first read this poem, I found it a little naive. You seemed to be concentrating more on the structure than the actual words. But the more I read it, the more it made me think about what a paladin should really be. A protector, a faithful lover, someone who is there in times of need. In essence, a good person who doesn't require recognition to go on doing the good he does. And it sort of made me cry a little when I realized how hardened I had become, how hardened so many of us have become, to what actually constitutes a person who has character and integrity. By messed-up modern standards, paladins just aren't as "interesting" as angsty people who kill and make up moralistic explanations. Your poem just brought home to me how sad that philosophy is. I'm glad that there are still some people like you in the world, who believe in heroes. I know this review might seem superfluous, since you've written this a long, long time ago, but I can't help it, I review anything that affects me a lot. Just thought you'd like to know you made an old, old, teenaged cynic cry. Love, Quavi P.S. Don't read any of my work. It's all about awful people who do horrible things to each other. I'm reviewing because I need to and not because I'm asking for return reviews. |
Frankie Lady of soup chapter 1 . 10/1/2005 Again, can't figure out why I never reviewed this... I have to say I like this better than your other one, soley down to the strength of your final line. You should be incredibly proud of that. |
HideAwayFairy chapter 1 . 3/30/2005 I haven't read the story of Paladin, I think I should now. It sounds as if you're telling what he is and what we are. That there is a hero living in everyone's heart and you may not know it by walking down they street, but it's there. I love the"Darkness comes and goes, but light never fades" line. I bellieve in all heroes. |
K. Starling chapter 1 . 2/11/2005 I like the rhythm of this - I can imagine chanting it. The last line strikes me especially, as well as the 'darkness comes, darkness goes'. Nice job; I had an image in my head after I finished reading it. |
Poppy Pyres chapter 1 . 1/3/2005 I like the atmosphere you have created in this poem... nicely done! :)i also enjoyed the strong rhythm of the lines."Believe in us, for we believe in you."lovely conclusion |
pandora505 chapter 1 . 12/30/2004 I like it. Usually paladins come across as snobbish but that isn't the case here. |
marshbar960 chapter 1 . 12/21/2004 wow, well done! i'm really inspired now. by the way, i particularly enjoyed the lines: "Darkness comes and darkness goes, but the light never fades" and"We are the beacon in the storm, and the candle that casts away the shadows". but i do have a question:what is a Paladin? call me stupid but i honestly don't know. at any rate, thanks for sharing and keep writing! |
Tk.T chapter 1 . 12/21/2004 Hey! I like your formatting style here! The deeper meaning in this poem has an abstract feel to it. I like it. It's almost suspenseful...forebooding...dark almost. I plan to read your fantasy novel when I get some time. Until then... Happy writing! Tk.T~ |
ClassyMinx chapter 1 . 12/21/2004 wow, nice poem, really good! Thxs for reviewing my poem. How old r u? |