Reviews for Realm Travelers
sugarplumfairie chapter 2 . 12/29/2004
You have managed to capture a great mystery at the beginning and have adopted the 'life of teens (in school)' with chapter one. You have expressed Iren's character in a excellent way - always observing the things around her in a dreamy way, and have made her into a realistic teen...full of emotion. A pleasure to read!

Toodles

sugarplumfairie
iglooey chapter 2 . 12/29/2004
Great story. I love your descriptions and the dialogue. Um...I sort of noticed that some of your lines don't flow. Like they sound sort of choppy. For example: You start talking about school food, then Ken gave a comment and then Iren made a comment. There are some grammatical errors and your introduction is really confusing. Wonderful job though and keep on writing.