Reviews for Father
avani.awakening chapter 1 . 12/28/2004
I really liked the part that says "you send a check", don't know why. The metaphor of the flower is cute but a little confusing. I get it, but you get very vague...first he is the flower, then you are the flower. Too many flowers. And when you say that he's not bound to any bed, I would assume it's a sexual connotation but it also sounds like you're trying to relate it to the child, safe and warm in their own bed. Which doesn't make sense. I think that if you took out the whole metaphor part,the poem would be lacking but very nicely done, all the same.