It was a little hard to follow because there wasn't a lot of character introduction, but the story was quite interesting. A lot of people have trouble coming up with plots and deciding where to go with their stories (like me), but there are also people who are great with coming up with stories, it's just writing them down in a way that's easy for the reader to understand that can be the problem. I think that if this had been written paragraphs instead of having a line break after every sentence, it would have been easier to read. A lot of comprehension also falls into formatting, which is something that only a reader can help a writer with. You are very talented, and I will keep you in my prayers along with all my other friends in the Armed Forces.