Reviews for Concrete Angel |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ahhh! Awww ohwww hmmm babyyy aww little thingsss lov them aw |
![]() ![]() ![]() I feel somethun from billyy |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw soooo cute! Hate Mandyy! Argh. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I support you for no takin the beer dear! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Epic song! (: |
![]() ![]() ![]() Favorite chapter by far! Idk if im depressed but your chapters are makin me cryyy:'( and i lov that cuz u made me feel his emotions and i get him. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved the song . always make me cry:( loved the chapter and all the before somehow i cant review! But this fic is amazing awesome! I looov it :3 |
![]() ![]() The story was very rushed, and the time lapses should have been more clear. Everything happened so quickly, especially the romances. Chester was extremely hot and cold - one day loving Mike, the end acting like he wants nothing to do with him. Though I love the angst, and I would've loved to see it drawn out a little more before Mike finally took Chester back. Plus Chester is kind of a douche by how many times he's played with Mikes feelings. Those are just the few I can think of off the top of my head immediately finishing this story. I absolutely love the story, it just could've been executed better. This is why I'm glad it was written in 04/05, and your writing had probably gotten way better, if you're still writing that is. I wonder how much better it would be if it was re-written. This review will probably end up not being seen because of how late I'm reading this, haha! |
![]() ![]() I love your story this far, I love characters like Mike, always have :) Thank you so much for writing this story |
![]() ![]() i dont like this. chester hurt him multiple times. needed chris action. ending to cheery &cheesy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your music choices I love every single song! And poem! |
![]() ![]() I can really relate to Mike I've thought and done so much like him other then his talent that is. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was such an amazing story and I loved it! Although I wasn't too happy that Mike and Chester got back together in the end. I don't know why but I really wanted Mike to end up with Chris...I'm so weird xD But I honestly did like this and think you did a great job :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() In my opinion your story startet out very good, but kept dieing down with every chapter. Also the lyrics or poems in every chapter became very annoying. I don't like the end either. Running away is just a weak solution for all his problems. I'd like the story better if you would have turned mike (or chester) into someone strong in the end by calling the authorities. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Try developing your sentences more. They were really choppy, and I felt like I was reading something written by a 14 year old. Which is possible I suppose. I honestly don't want to sound mean, I just think that that is something you should work on. Of course, this story has been up for a while, so possibly you already have. |