lol! three pages is gud *nods* :D ur getting better by each chapter. ur writing style has improved immensely, the only flaws i kan find is ur characterization (yes i know im a hypocrite) i cant find myself relating to your characters and no offence intended but daren seems slightly immature for a teenage guy heh, i hope u dont mind me saying so :D. I love ur imagery, vivid and descriptive and that bit about the room being dyed blood red, that was beautiful. You'd find it helpful getting a beta reader, that way ud improve a lot (not that ur not gud anyway but theres alwayz room for improvement) :D i have 2 go thru the hunter chappue now heh, im finally going 2 update *claps slef* took me long enough...

Whoa... that WAS longer than usual... i luv ur description btw, ur visualisation is realli gud :D Thx 4 emailing me otherwise i never wud have known uve updated...ive been so busy! btw (im not sure if uve reviewed heh...im just not sure if ur alerts r wacky like mine heh...) ive updated Hunter :D bibi! and email me wen u update again!

This could use a beta, but the idea is very captivating. Great work.

this is good! please update! will daren breake Sorya's curse? tell me!

good job leah i liked your story very much keep up the good work

whoa! that was a REALLY good chapter. ur writing styles improved a lot in this chapter. Update soon and thanx for the email!

Excellent idea for a story but there are several grammactical errors including some tenses. ust go through and edit this and you should be good to go! Anyway, update soon.

kuel chapter. Yepz it was longer and i went bck and checked out the new thing. Plz email me when u update cuz my alerts arent working :D. Also, hehe... i got a favour 2 ask hehe...do u reckon that, if u get time, u could check out my fic? Hunter. It's only got 2 chapters at the moment so it's not much (it says 4 but that includes the 4ward and Full summary) bibi! UPDATE SOON!

I think you should make your chapters longer! i think their to short, other wise i think your story is awesome!

i love ur description, for a first fic its brilliant! I keep looking at this and thinking about how gud u are compared 2 how i was on my first fic. i missed out like half the comma's and had this really weird way of writing :P, ive improved now tho, this chappie was better than the others. better written. ur paragraphing's real good but u mite want 2 check thru this a lil, uve got quite a lot of typos. i like the prince lol...real arrogant :P. nice name..Daren.

lol, this is pretty cool so far. its got quite a lot of punctuation errors tho and need 2 work on sum of the paragraphing, its way better than my first fic tho! lol, mine was crap.. i deleted it off the site ot embarrased me so much. k i'll go read the rest now :P