Reviews for What if?
samantha chapter 1 . 8/23/2005
wow. that, in my opinion, is one of your strongest works so far. keep it up kay!
Nails For Your Crucifix chapter 1 . 1/7/2005
This felt very repetitive. Yes, the message changed slightly as the poem progressed, but seeing the same words over and over again get tedious after a while. Not only that, but the same words are used several times in the same stanza. Perhaps that was done on purpose for emphasis, but the amount of times you can do that has its limits.

I encourage you to keep writing, however. That is the only way any of us improve. I look forward to reading your work in the future.
Jacquelyn Phoenix chapter 1 . 1/7/2005
Excellent idea but I thought it was a little repetitive. Was that for emphasis? It made me want to stop reading, it made no sense.