The End? Or the end of the beginning?

jess is lonely; think daddy will help?

I like the book... But Jeshycka's fire faery name is Bradhadair which sounds like Brad had air... was it suppose to be like that? Fantastic book!

I liked this it was nice I cant wait for the rest...

*Runs off* On to the sequel!

it's really good. it seems to me like you mixed, Charmed, with the Sweep series as well as your own independant ideas. I like it alot!

MB

I loved this story... I read Pentagram 2 before the Pentagram 1, and it's very interesting. Did I mention I loved this story? Can't wait for the next Petagram stories, and the finishing of the second.

I LOVE IT! It's so cool. Such a good idea. I think I'm gonna go read the water one, now. I love the names, too. Especially the spelling of 'Jeshycka.'

Mona

The writing is progressing rather well from here. But You still need alot more details. You have some more mistakes and typos. But It is greatly improving from the first chapter.

Interesting. The writing is still ify... But I'm getting into the story now. Try and have longer chapters.

I must say that this needs alot of work. The senseless use of 'y's in your names is gatting to be a little annoying and you lack alot of detail. It is as if you are just stringing together sentances, not making a story. Try a litter more detail and flow, and work on sendace variety. Most of your sentaces strat with either 'she' or 'Jeshycka', That gets a little old after one paragraph.

I'll keep reading but this nees some seious work. It is getting a little better each chapter though.

D

The premis seems good enough but the exicution is if-y. I like the idea of this story/series. But I can't get past the why you are writing it. Try adding more details and mixing things up a bit. The Black Black Black Black Black is a bit... Boring. You have plenty of places that more details cona fit. Just try the old Writing advice.

Show, Don't tell.

great story.

Aww, it's over. But I saw on your profile that you're working on the Water Witch. So that's good...

BRILLIANT ENDING!

i love it! And i cant wait for the next installment!

you've gotten my brain working again girl... so.. YEAH! COOLIES!

have fun on your trip! i might be able to get more chapters up for you! BYE!

sweet! i love this character!and i like that idea too! the image, i mean...i can almost see it.. :D

where ya leavin?

oh well, if you cant help me thats ok too!

WRITE ON FELLOW WRITER! FOR I HAVE HAD SUGAR AND AM NUTS RIGHT NOW! YEAH!