I really enjoyed this chapter. Different from your other stories. Maybe because it has a different type of humor? Any way, it got more of the fantasy fell to it. Kinda reminds me of the book "Slaves of the Mastery".

On Chapter two. Lots of great action in this piece and Lord Zircon a fun-loving Crim.

Your words bring lots of wonderful visuals - Now that's a comment I'd like to get :)

Now this one I'm liking Robster! This is fantastic, it's very very good. I love the names, wish I thought of em. Well I've thought of one. I also have a character called Marek and I've got one called Humdrum. By the the way was the teacher's name?

The things I particularly liked were as follows...

"His eyebrows pulled together as he glared at Cookie..."

I loved the 'dreamy' joke. This was nice.

I enjoyed the girls attempts at being sick

And I have to say Cookie was rather entertaing in Smurrell's lair.

Finally the flying jokes. Attitude of a foot - classic!

I have yet to read Chapter two, so I'll be looking forward to that.

but... but... this was posted back in January, where is the next chapter. Stop holding out

*acts shocked* oh, EVIL CLIFFIE! Very, very good first chapter, I aplaud you. *applauds* The first fe sentences ("Humand don't exsist.") sounds like something from the movie Frengully. Have you ever seen it?

But anyway, back to the original thing, this is a EXTREMLEY good first chapter. Please continue! :) ~Sapphire Unicorn~