|Reviews for Happiness is sadistic|
| ossining chapter 1 . 1/19/2005
I really like your first line...it really opens the poem nicely. Very dark, but yes, great stuff.
| nine iron chapter 1 . 1/13/2005
I would not see it as a love poem, what this poem lacks is intensity, you spoiled a great idea with a flat ending. It needs to be impacting, it is just predictible at the moment. It leaves the reader putting this poem in as one of the crowd, even after such a great idea has been displayed.
Keep writing and good luck