|Reviews for White Walls|
| dustytiger chapter 1 . 6/26/2005
wow this is really powerful, and very well written, it's a lovely peice really, the last two lines really hit home for me, wow, great work, thank you for sharing and thnx for the review
| nuclear red chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
Aside from some grammatical errors, (PROOFREAD!) this was good. I really like some of the imagery you used here.
Keep up the good work! Always be yourself!
| AllyCred chapter 1 . 3/21/2005
like this this so much emotion coming through...but i think a little bit more punctuation would help the reader know when to stop and start and when the lines run on...but nicely done...i like it...ur words are very deep and powerful. lots of love AllyCred
| boy that you loved chapter 1 . 1/29/2005
'aptmyn, aptmyd, aptmyae, batditwwshfh'
| Autumn Dawn chapter 1 . 1/23/2005
wow...im so sorry about your friend. this poem is beautiful though. this poem flows a lot better than the first one you posted.
| Keith Andrew chapter 1 . 1/20/2005
That was very heartfelt and a lovely tribute. Excellent-Keith Andrew
| Shinji Boi69 chapter 1 . 1/16/2005
hey, good poem. GOod read too. Keep it up and write more soon. till then,shinji
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 1/15/2005
This flowed really well. Much better than your firts. Well done yet another poem of yours that I truelly enjoy !
* Noelle: With love there will always be pain. So let me die before the pain over comes. *
| KonekOniko chapter 1 . 1/14/2005
Kudos, AD (hmn, maybe I should call you ADD P). I must admit, this work was much better then your first. The flow's clearer, much better then the first one. Overall, this was a well written poem; the emotion and descriptions benefited the mood of the poem, though I feel as if something is missing. Like, there's a part you wanted to put in the poem, but you left it out because of personal reasons or something. Well, good job, I'm looking forward to seeing more from you.
Sumi-chan; A whisper in the wind, my love...
| Purified Angel chapter 1 . 1/14/2005
Very good poem. I like it alot
| Aku no Otaku chapter 1 . 1/14/2005
awesome! read it before, but still awesome the second time
| DOORphrame chapter 1 . 1/14/2005
This is really good...